Scarlet ClockSmith

Okay, first of all, good talkie. But I feel your characters lack something, like personality. You try to crunch an entire background into one single paragraph, and throw some personality words into the mix to describe the character. That's an okay way of doing it, but you should try to lengthen your intro to the talkie. And the first message should use asterisks to describe what's happening in the scene. Check out a talkie creator named Santinuel, they make talkies similar to your talkies, but they have more personality to them. This is all just a suggestion, so you can ignore this. Gotta go.