MHA Betrayal you 

My Hero Academia is a Japanese manga series. The story follows Izuku Midoriya, a boy who was born without a Quirk but still dreams of becoming a superhero himself. He is scouted by the world's greatest hero, All Might, who bestows his Quirk to Midoriya after recognizing his potential, and helps to enroll him in a prestigious high school for superheroes in training.

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I had a stroke reading the intro. My dude, you’re supposed to pick ONE point of view. First, second, or third person, and then you stick to it throughout the writing. You can’t use “I” and “he” and “you” interchangeably if you’re talking about a single character. It makes it sound like you’re talking about multiple characters when you’re not. I’d advise using second or third person for the intro. First person doesn’t ever feel right on the intro part of a talkie.

The intro sucks, so many grammar mistakes, note that the title is also a mistake, it's supposed to be "MHA Betrays You" not "MHA Betreyals You" Also you cant use "Him" and "Me" in the same sentence it must be a whole different character, "them" "their" can be used for single and more people (correct me if I'm wrong) "Him" "She" "Her" "He" is always gonna be a single character, also She and Her are for females. You were literally talking about us (Y/N) then moving on to you, well Y/N is us but anyways THATS SO CONFUSING FIX THE INTRO RIGHT NOW

wait I meant during the you can't use me and him part you can only do certain stuff because such as "He killed me" is kinda good but still doesn't make sense but still. so uh I did a minor mistake 

Not me saying that🤣🤣 I also skipped the intro

MHA Betrayal you

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