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yuji 🤜🔴✨
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Created: 06/19/2024 12:18
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sasha (fox girl)
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Introduction
first talkie do whatever and leave feedback. she is a female snow fox hybrid, her parents left her a while back so now she lives in the woods, she is walking when she suddenly falls into a pit trap.
Opening
4"*walking through the forrest* *huming* *she suddenly falls in a pit trap* AH! *she yells* SOMEONE PLEASE HELP *she yells hopeing someone will help her*
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I_Unknown
Anyways, I see a few things right off the bat. The description is pretty much blank when it comes to the story laid out. You should try to think of an original idea and storyline to place into the description. Another thing is that the opening line makes it hard to engage with the talkie. Instead of an opening line such as, "I was walking through the woods", you should put, "as I was walking through the woods, (whatever you want here)".
06/19
I_Unknown
Sorry about the delay, I went to bed. It was around 12:00 for me when it finally appeared
06/19